tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6809247075832777344.post7718240777379556015..comments2021-02-10T03:19:03.962-08:00Comments on *Sins of the Eldest Daughter*: Poems from ON THE BODYAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/00216373605122045936noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6809247075832777344.post-57476217039664090262010-03-14T12:51:45.982-07:002010-03-14T12:51:45.982-07:00Hi Dina...sorry for the belated comment but it too...Hi Dina...sorry for the belated comment but it took me a while to accomplish the behind-the-scenes events to make it happen.<br /><br />My mother has published two poetry books;<br /><br />Grandma Proses, copyright 1985<br />Abstractions, copyright 1991<br />both by Shirley A. Bender<br /><br />Mom has enjoyed writing for most of her life. When you posted 'Poems from ON THE BODY', I knew I had to get my mother's take. Mom is not a computer person so I printed out a copy of your Blog, which at the time of printing your latest entry was 'My Zero Birthday'. I copied everything you posted up to this date and asked her to review it and if so inclined, add her comments so that I could reiterate them to you. Here's what she had to say;<br /><br />Regarding 'Unnamable Things (I)'<br /><br />The line, "...like boiling water on wax dragging features..." she says, '...very beautiful and commanding image'.<br /><br />****************************<br /><br />Regarding 'Unnamable Things (II)'<br /><br />This poem is much more powerful and introspective than anything I've ever written. If someone this good can't get published, there's little or no hope for the rest of us.<br /><br />****************************<br /><br />Regarding 'Moving in the Dark'<br /><br />The line, "...asphalt roads that drink the light" she says, '...excellent description.'<br /><br />The line, "...the clock that never tells time just how early how late." she says, '...Very original concept of a clock's function.'<br /><br />****************************<br /><br />Regarding 'Step Ladder'<br /><br />Can't relate to this one. If I knew the poet and or the circumstance that caused her to write STEP LADDER, I'm sure I could relate to her meaning.<br /><br />****************************<br /><br />Regarding, 'For Billy; for All the People and Things I cannot Have'<br /><br />The line, "...a past that has already eaten the banquet of her future." she says, '...beautiful image'. [TRYING TO BREATHE', (pg.18 G.ma Proses), my poetic attempt at expressing some of the same feelings in 'For Billy']<br /><br />Visit my Blog (http://coffeenuts-iam.blogspot.com/) to read mom's poem, 'Trying to Breathe'...and many others.<br /><br />****************************<br /><br />Regarding, 'Waiting on the World to Change'<br /><br />This writer seems to be obsessed with TIME. (and the ravages there of). There seems to be no concept (at least verbally) of the benefits of maturity. She seems to look at her life thru 'what-is-lost' glasses instead of 'what-is-found' thru living. ONE DAY AT A TIME SWEET JESUS! ...and we're lucky if we get even that!<br /><br />Mom suggested I share with you a couple more of her poems, 'Last Will and Testament for the 21st Century' and 'ANANKE (what has to be)'...both of these have been posted to my Blog if you're so inclined.<br /><br />Last night we had my folks out for dinner and I showed mom your Blog to give her a feel for all the additional posts you have made since your 'My Zero Birthday' excerpt. Longer story short, she hopes to read more of your blog in the future via my fathers computer.<br /><br />As I've told you not long ago Dina, I myself am not a prolific reader so to the extent my 2-cents worth of comments will be of any use to you will likely be slim to none. However that said, your Blog has sparked a new interest in me previously thought to be non-existent...I do enjoy reading your Blog, albeit the often and somewhat difficult content and will continue to do so. <br /><br />Thanks for sharing,<br />CoffeenutsCoffeenutshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07027845675535403067noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6809247075832777344.post-83001787085834306362010-02-22T21:32:21.734-08:002010-02-22T21:32:21.734-08:00only the present day shorthand will suffice: OMG....only the present day shorthand will suffice: OMG.<br /><br />[tears]windowtotheworldhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06059519537138579370noreply@blogger.com